AW: chapter 01 page 09

posted June 16th, 2013, 11:17 am


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June 16th, 2013, 11:24 am

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2nd page~
uhg sorry for derpness on these pages ''OTL

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June 16th, 2013, 6:15 pm

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I just found this comic and it looks good.

The only problem that I see is the grammar. I'm going to go ahead and assume that English is not your first language. Even if it is that's fine, my first language is Gibberish. So yeah...>.>;;

If you really want to attract readers and not have any comment on bad grammar, I'd suggest getting a beta reader to read through these before you post them and fix any grammar problems.

I'd volunteer...but I'm easily distracted and not a very dedicated person. So I'm pretty much out of the question. yeah...

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June 17th, 2013, 4:14 am

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@arrowriver: Well, for first. Thanks for your kind words!
I'm a person in charge of storyline and dialoges so... Yeah it's true my first language is far from English but I admit I felt in it quite confident until I read that. Seems that I still need a lot of improvement OTL
Of course I'll gladly use your suggestion and we'll look for a beta reader.
I hope reading this story will be more enjoyable and understandable then!
Thanks for your comment!

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June 23rd, 2013, 1:48 am

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@DiMrokku: Oh, oh, can I do it? Unless you already have someone or would prefer someone you already know. I've done a bit of beta reading of stories written by people who don't have English as their first language, but I've always wanted to do a webcomic.

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June 24th, 2013, 6:19 am

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@potatoe1988: Oh, I've already asked friend of mine who is native English speaker to do a beta reading of previous pages D: But it's really kind of you and I'll keep that in mind and if it wouldn't be a problem I could ask you maybe in the future to check some pages.
So thank you in advance and for your offer. I didn't expect that :D

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June 24th, 2013, 6:22 am

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@DiMrokku: Okay, no problem :) Let me know if you ever need any help.

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